Буду безумно благодарна, если кто-то уделит время на проверку и даст рекомендации по улучшению навыков письма эссе для IELTS general. Это первая проба. Вижу, что слабовато, но не знаю как над этим поработать. Какую лексику/грамматику подучить? Аргументация слабая или неясная? Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. It is hard to deny the term of happiness has always been quite controversial. One school of thought is that early years bring the greatest joy of a lifetime, others, however, get much pleasure being adult. While childhood appears to be a more careless period, providing quite an amount of time for preferable activities, my view is that the opportunities adults have, more likely make their dreams come true. The general belief that youth has more advantages is fairly reasonable. One argument is the availability of time, which allows ones to devote themselves to the most pleasurable pastimes, as well as to take up something new, broadening the horizons, or just to have fun hanging out with friends. By and large, it may seem fascinating, however one obvious drawback is that the age provides no chance to do these in a prospective way, due to some financial or parents` restrictions. Though neither of them might be an obstacle in some families. The alternative view supposes that the happiness in adulthood is more likely to be profound. It is particularly because of the freedom of choice proposed in various aspects of life. In other words, it is all about people`s decisions of how much to earn and how much to spend on the entertainment, leisure or other delights, what career dedicate their life to, whether to travel or not. Besides, it is the time people realise the value of life satisfaction and are able and eager to perceive it thoroughly. They, definitely, apreciate the moments of felicity greater. Even the pressing number of responsibilities can`t overweight the merits, as over time people tend to cope with them easier. To summarise, I would say that while being a child may seem the happiest time, the opportunities adults are ussually offered, contribute to the happiness, in spite of the responsibities people have to deal with daily.
